IELTS Essay研究　このエッセイの良くない所は？(2)

Posted: 2022/08/12 | By: 高橋拓実

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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

The modern medinice develops dramatically in recent years. This requires the doctors to extend their role, not only in treating the patients, but also taking part in medical trials. Although many people accept this fact, I would insist that the doctors should focus on the patients.

On the one hand, treatment is not easy. First of all, the development of medical techniques such as CT, MRI, PET scans... helps to detect new diseases. Therefore, the doctors must update latest knowledge and state-of-the-art techniques to improve healthcare qualities and they have no time for researching by their own. Secondly, the future of medicine is individual treatment. This means that each patient needs a specific approach and treatment. The time for each patient will increase. There is no doubt that the physicians couldn't join any studies.

On the other hand, it is true to say that an academic researcher needs different qualities from a clinician. Firstly, a researcher needs to be good at mathematics. This is far from the daily practice of a doctor. For example, a good cardiologist will need to be good at clinical examination, hearing the heart sounds, being familiar with cardiovascular medicine. There is no way to help him to be a mathematician with his learning or routine practice. Besides, it takes many years to become good doctors. They spend a large part of their life in the hospital: staying with patients, acquiring new skills, attending countless night shifts. I'm sure that the academic researches will invite them to join, this will raise the question of wasting their talents for a wrong purpose.

In conclusion, being good doctors and academic researchers at the same time appears to be a new concept. Personally, I hold the idea of keeping tradiotional role of doctors. The patients need them, not researchers.

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